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Fuck Warning profanity !!!!
Fuck the clever dicks of this world ,
Who think they know better.
Piss on those who live to put you down.
Shit on those who don't accept my choices,
They are mine and mine alone.
Even if my language makes you frown.
I'm sick of worrying about opinion,
I'm gonna be me.
If you don't like it ,
Then bollocks to this fucking town
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Race_9togo
Tue, 2010-11-16 21:53
LMAO
No argument from ME on the subject.
Respectfully, Race
"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo
http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo
lou
Wed, 2010-11-17 00:14
Jim
Poetry, is freedom to push the boundaries
Lou.
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Wed, 2010-11-17 01:32
Shirl
Your my champion , a big support, love ya !!
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Geezer
Wed, 2010-11-17 11:37
A good old...
A good old - fashioned rant
For those who say I can't
I would tell them where to go
But I think they already know
Hope they take a cue from this
I'll point them where to kiss
Mind not what they have to say
I'll be doing it my way
Couldn't help myself, just keep on being you. ~ Love ya, Gee
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
lou
Sat, 2010-11-20 13:30
Thank you
thanks Gee
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
scribbler
Wed, 2010-11-17 11:41
poem
Your poetry would improve greatly if you would just say what you REALLY feel lol.........scribbler
lou
Sat, 2010-11-20 13:28
Ha bloody ha
lol
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Kailashana2
Wed, 2010-11-17 16:54
Young lady! Do you eat with
Young lady! Do you eat with that mouth? Sorry, couldn't help myself... there's just so much bullshit on my plate these days.
;-)
And Stan I'd be careful twhat I ask of Lou....she just might tell you, and then what? lol,.
lou
Sat, 2010-11-20 13:27
THANKS
LOL
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Victorclaude
Sat, 2010-11-20 14:14
Lou,
Lou,
What can I say but rock and fuckin' roll~?~!~!
Victor
"When a pickpocket meets a holy man all he sees are his pockets."
Unknown (at least to me)
lou
Mon, 2010-11-29 11:27
victor
thanks
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
loved
Mon, 2010-11-29 11:48
ur the master
the master of thy dick
piss
and shit
i hate these fuckin words
come out of my fucking
salivary lips
but
we all do say so
yes
loves the fucking word
we like to hear
from a poet like lou
yeah yeah
that's uuuuuuuuuuuuuuu
yeah twice
as u don't like to hear
or do thrice
loved
loved
Mon, 2010-11-29 20:06
You skipped me
unknowingly or hopefully or willingly
WHICH???
loved
lou
Mon, 2010-11-29 23:00
Loved
I'm sorry didn't mean to be rude, thank you for your kind remarks
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Hooded Stranger
Mon, 2010-11-29 12:55
Lou
Lou,
this had a good aggressive tempo and theme, and I liked the rhyming of the last lines. The last stanza was a little short in the last line, so if you wanted it to be uniform, you could add 'fucking'...before 'Town'.
My OCD tells me the last stanza should have lines 2 & 3 on the same line in keeping with the other two stanza's.
Brutishly angry...love it!
HS
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lou
Mon, 2010-11-29 14:20
HS
Thanks mate, glad you liked it, i like to give my poems a very strong british feel . when i can, as you know.
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
lou
Tue, 2010-11-30 05:08
Ian
Ian
thank you .
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!