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Spent
Memories like ashes
Blowing in the breeze
Separating and disappearing
A whisper
Thoughts of you
Like tinder
Burning me in your flames
Incinerating my brain
Leaving me breathless
Insane
I construct barriers
To keep you away
Too hot to touch
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Comments
Nichole
Sat, 2012-01-07 04:18
I like this
When I read about the ashes, I can see them in my mind spinning and twirling in the wind. This is great writing when you can SEE and FEEL what the writer is saying. I love it. Brings back some memories with it as well, bitter sweet ones i'll never forget.
Nichole
lou
Sat, 2012-01-07 07:54
Nichole
thank you
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Candlewitch
Sat, 2012-01-07 11:16
Dear Lou,
I'm with Nichole, in recognizing your very great talent and ability to involve the reader in the reading experience. favorite lines:
Thoughts of you
Like tinder
Burning me in your flames
Incinerating my brain
Leaving me breathless
Insane
I have no suggestions, only appreciation for the work.
always, Cat
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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
lou
Sat, 2012-01-07 12:08
Cat
thank you so much
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
loved
Sat, 2012-01-07 12:10
One thing for certain Lou... I know
Some folks.... spend
and many are
SPENT...
HAPPY NEW YEAR 2012,
ITS NOT THE END...
loved