The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Home" presents a narrative journey of the speaker finding a place of comfort and acceptance, which is a compelling concept. However, there are areas in the poem that could benefit from further development and clarity.

The first stanza sets a tone of unease with the phrases "Fear crawling" and "curiosity whispers". However, the source of this fear and curiosity is not clearly articulated. Providing more context or imagery here could help the reader better understand the speaker's initial emotional state.

The dialogue in the poem is a powerful tool for character development, but the characters themselves could be more fully realized. The man in the recliner, for instance, plays a significant role in the poem but lacks distinctive characteristics. Developing this character more could enhance the emotional impact of the poem.

The poem also uses a lot of abstract language, particularly in the latter half. Phrases like "a friend for the nights that seemed like years" are evocative, but they could be grounded in more concrete imagery. This would help the reader to more fully engage with the speaker's experiences and emotions.

The poem's structure could also benefit from more consistency. The line lengths vary greatly, which can disrupt the poem's rhythm. Establishing a more consistent rhythm could enhance the flow of the poem and make it more engaging to read.

Lastly, the poem's conclusion could be more impactful. The final line "I call it home" is a powerful statement, but it could be set up more effectively. Providing more build-up to this revelation could make the conclusion more satisfying for the reader.

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I do not usually agree with the AI function. In this case I think it has some good suggestions. I did enjoy your poem. I must have been a long road Home. It is nice to see you posting your poems more often.

*hugs, Cat

Hello, Paul,
A healing, safe place. Probably temporary, but so significant. I really feel the bond and comfort. You may want to check a couple possessive words:

* this house is yours
* the world shut off its tv

I really enjoyed this. It has a warm, compassionate feel to it.
Thank you!
L