in this piece, seem to bump along and give one pause for thought.
I would say that you don't need the [And] at the beginning of the seventh line.
The line makes the thought very clear without it.
The lines that go: "when there are [amounts] of clouds and stars" seems a little bit confusing.
I would say:
"When there are infinite stars,
elements that you wish for
that would light up her eyes
bringing home the victory at last
to one you share with loving.

When you see only clouds
and seeing through only their eyes
and feel the disappointment
and what you now know as old.

Of course, I may have changed the meaning of what you meant to say,
and if I did, feel free to ignore my advice and comments.
~ Geez.
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Hello, Mark,
A bit of a short narrative poem, touching and sentimental. When reading, I hear the voice of Robert Redford narrating the final scene in "A River Runs Through It."

"Eventually, all things merge into one, and a river runs through it. The river was cut by the world's great flood and runs over rocks from the basement of time. On some of the rocks are timeless raindrops. Under the rocks are the words, and some of the words are theirs. I am haunted by waters."

This feeling is in your poem, but the reverence is to the vast sky, instead of the river.
Beautiful!
L

Glad you saw to use some of my comments. ~ Geez.
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