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GoinGoing,Gone
Going , Going, Gone
Going is the present
fading into the past
Going is the past
fading into the present
Thought rides the high winds
Being tossed and thrown into both
Gone is the future
It no longer lives
It's diabolical laughter
ringing through my fears
Gone the reality
of unending dream
Ghostly images paled by light
returning only in the dead of night
Taunting, haunting going on
tempting me to do what is wrong
going going going
Till I'm gone
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Comments
Candlewitch
Mon, 2012-05-14 11:45
Dear Chrys,
On a second reading of this surreal piece, I like these lines best:
Ghostly images paled by light
returning only in the dead of night
Taunting, haunting going on
tempting me to do what is wrong
Your poem is definitely inspirational to my imagination! I'll see what I can come up with!
always, eddy (& cat)
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MDT
Mon, 2012-05-14 16:06
Going..gone
I liked this one especially because to me it talks about time how everything comes and goes..change is constant...we come we go :)
Peace love and harmony light the path we must take. - MDT
China Blue
Mon, 2012-05-14 16:20
Marg
Thank you it is interesting to see the interpretaion you have of this . It is quite different from what I had in mind when I wrote it
thanks for the read
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)