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Glass of yesteryears

Submitted by Edward nigma on Sun, 2024-09-08 06:50

Harrowingly
holding up
a glistening
golden glazed
glass of yesteryears
above a
withering wishful
world of
blackened blood worn tears.
Looking down
the leisurely
limping line
whilst wondering
what I would
leave behind. Footsteps
seeping
into the solemn
ground worn
with age never to
be found .

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Sun, 2024-09-08 08:46

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to see you! I was hoping to see something from you, I used your situation to tell someone of your tenacity and drive to leave your mark in the world. I am always inspired to write of determination and success, and how it matters that you try. I have often admired your way of helping me feel the little insinuations of truth, by your precise language. The most interesting lines?
"Looking down the leisurely limping line
while wondering what I would leave behind."
Yes, I've been there. My only complaint? [Worned] should be [worn]. Most excellent use of minimal words to give the sense of it.
~ Geez.
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Edward nigma

Sun, 2024-09-08 09:27

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Now a days it’s very hard to write poetry trust me I still have the drive . It’s just my health that’s a problem
I want to do more but what else can I do lying in a bed twenty four seven. I’m still writing every single day . I’m never going to let poetry go it’s my one true passion .

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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Geezer

Sun, 2024-09-08 09:39

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I appreciate whatever you send us. My hat's off to you, I wish that I had as much resolution and drive as you. I also have
health problems and find it very difficult to work some days. Keep writing, my friend, enter some contests, send us something every day, as long as you are writing... Anyway, great to see you, ~ Geez.
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