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Daughter

My faults are many, my sins are very few,
Betraying myself daily as I bend and break for you.
I feel lacking, but excessive at the same time.
Begging forgiveness, never knowing my crime

I wake up trembling, after your day demanding
Anxious, hearing you across the landing.
Nervously hesitant I come to my feet,
Panicked by which mood, today I will meet.

You traded my love and affection
For drama chaos and Attention,
I would of done anything for you!
How could you be so cruel?

Aching for your followers opinions,
Impressing your body of Minions.
With tales of hardship and lies.
About the mother you daily despised.

Don't you try to deny it,
I know your lies in public and private.
Humility and patience, is never known
Your turgid temper never outgrown.

Mocking my past with sardonic delight,
Furiously typing words of anger and spite.
Mixing your bile with half truths,
I was only here for you to abuse.

In the night, you left without a word,
Radio silence, no mention of all that occurred.
Burnt your bridges, my lesson was well learned
Your choice to leave, but mine for you never to return.

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My 20 year old daughter declared she has always hated me and has lived with us back for 6 months and she has abused my husband and I. She made me want to leave my own house This is a rough draft of how I'm feeling I will clean it up when I'm in a better place xx
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I can feel your pain, for it is palpable in you poetry. You probably feel betrayed by your daughter. Feelings of shock and a vile surprise, run through these lines. I felt the same way when my nephew broke my heart, after years of unselfish love. My favorite lines are:

In the night, you leff without a word,
Radio silence, no mention of all that occurred.
Burnt your bridges, my lesson was well learned
Your choice to leave, but mine for you never to return.

*hugs, Cat

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Your comment means so much thankyou, I wrote it in the early morning, head still spinning with everything she did, I have forgiven her so many times well no more xxx

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I am glad if my words have given you some comfort. Hold tight to your convictions, they will keep you strong!

*hugs, Cat

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I'm trying to, I know she is now making me out to be the villain of the piece, even though I've done everything I could for her xxx

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She sounds like a very unhappy person to cause you so much pain. I have a five letter word for her, that comes to mind to assign to her. In time, I hope, her cover will slip. Maybe when she screws up and sh!ts on someone else people will start to see her for what she really is. Some people are so vile in their anger, that they find joy only in causing misery. You are an unfortunate victim.

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