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Chicken Little Liar
Oh, how sweet the sound
Of your honey soaked voice
Regurgitating promises
Only fit to mend a broken heart
All the while hiding
Canary colored feathers
Beneath a feaux persona
For your own disgraceful pleasure
Secret after secret revealed
The lemon around your eyes
You talked the talk
Until the talk exposed your lies
Chicken little
Your sky is falling
Better run and hide
I don't think I've ever seen
A brighter shade of yellow
Then what illuminated
From your backside
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words:
Last stanza is intentionally longer
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Sat, 2022-07-16 13:38
Whoa...
You done slapped the yellow right off their backside! I can appreciate the slapping technique and the total knock-out power here. Nothing to crit. ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack
Sat, 2022-07-16 14:04
Thank you Gee
Sure was a bright yellow!! Thank you for your high praise. :)
:)
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Sun, 2022-07-17 07:02
dear RoseBlack,
YES YES YES!!!
I loved it!!!
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RoseBlack
Sun, 2022-07-17 07:26
Thank you Cat
Certainly was a fun but truthful write.
~RoseBlack~
Warrior Princess
Sun, 2022-07-17 19:38
RoseBlack I love the boldness
RoseBlack I love the boldness and honesty in your poem. The following lines were my favourite:
Chicken little
Your sky is falling
Better run and hide
I don't think I've ever seen
A brighter shade of yellow
Then what illuminated
From your backside
Candice Vitalien
"Keep glowing even if no one can see your light.
For among the hidden stars on the darkest night
Someone will look up and behold
The flickering hope; words untold;
Strength and Honour my Warriors! "
RoseBlack
Sun, 2022-07-17 20:15
Thank you Candice
For your input and for stopping by. I am glad you enjoyed.
~RoseBlack~