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A Long Love Poem
I like you girl;
better'n chicken,
better'n liking myself I reckon
more than any other thing alive;
more than life passing,
or the promise of time
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Bonitaj
Tue, 2011-07-12 16:07
ah Moonman!
Loved the brevity of the piece and the bathos of the title!
A simple expression from a complex man - as is reflected in the last three lines!! Cowboys don't cry, they just tell it like it is! ;)
cheers
Boni
Bonitaj
themoonman
Tue, 2011-07-19 09:46
Hi Boni ...
not so complex, at least my kids don't think so!
ahhh, that's another story
thanks
Richard
Kailashana2
Tue, 2011-07-12 15:30
Thank you for the poem
Thank you for the poem Richard and thank you for the perfect comment Boni, much enjoyed both.
~A
themoonman
Tue, 2011-07-19 09:46
Anna ...
a tip of the brim to ya
weirdelf
Tue, 2011-07-12 15:37
Best love poem I've read in a long time.
Just a strange glitch happening.
On my screen
I like you girl
reads as
I like you girt
very weird, if it happens on other things you might want to check for code in your post. Remember always post from a .txt file is best or maybe you put in ; instad of a comma. Makes a big difference.[chuckles]
cheers,
Jess
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themoonman
Tue, 2011-07-19 09:48
Lol ...
When I read this, you had me looking hard to see if I'd misspelled,
and it does look funny .... thanks Jess
themoonman
Tue, 2011-07-19 09:49
Hi Ian ...
thanks, it was a bit long (lol)
lou
Thu, 2011-07-14 03:22
Richard
Sounds a little like a red neck love poem LOL !!
Seriously, I liked the fact it was straight to the point, also it made me smile.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
themoonman
Tue, 2011-07-19 09:50
LOL ...
we all need some lovin
thanks Lou
weirdelf
Tue, 2011-07-19 10:06
even rednecks?
you can replace trucks and dogs.
[you know I'm just being a smartass, love the poem]
cheers,
Jess
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loved
Wed, 2011-07-20 17:11
themoonman
you give immortality to sex ,
I only simply profess
This is my brief
and belief,
Nothing beyond a girl...
never, ever
one should
Chicken
in front of her.....
loved