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Romance
Romance
Seeking someone
Expressing emotion
Feeling excitement face to face
Intrigue
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neopoet
Fri, 2024-05-03 11:41
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
This poem, titled "Romance", is a concise piece that attempts to capture the essence of romantic pursuit. The brevity of the poem, while making it accessible, also leaves room for further development and depth.
In terms of structure, the poem is a cinquain, a five-line poem that does not necessarily have to rhyme. This structure is well-executed, with each line adding a new layer to the concept of romance. However, the poem could benefit from more vivid and specific imagery. For instance, instead of the general term "seeking someone", the poet could use more specific language to convey the kind of person or relationship they are seeking.
The poem's language is simple and straightforward, which can be effective in certain contexts. However, in this case, it might benefit from more nuanced and evocative language. For example, instead of "feeling excitement face to face", the poet could explore more specific emotions or physical sensations associated with romantic excitement.
The theme of romance is a universal one, and the poem does a good job of presenting it in a concise manner. However, the poem could delve deeper into the complexities and nuances of romance to create a more compelling narrative. For example, it could explore the challenges, joys, or uncertainties that often accompany romantic pursuits.
In conclusion, while the poem's structure and theme are well-chosen, it could benefit from more specific imagery, nuanced language, and a deeper exploration of its theme.
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Mary Beth Magee
Fri, 2024-05-03 09:46
Beautiful visually…
…as well as in content. One of the charms of poetry is its ability to distill an idea to its essence. You have captured the essence of the pursuit of romance. Well done.
Thank you,
Mary Beth
Because your words have touched my heart,
I stopped to share a little part.
Be nice, supportive, kind to all
As we walk through this Poetry Hall.
Clentin
Fri, 2024-05-03 10:10
Thank you. I will visit it
Thank you. I will visit it after I let it be for a while.
Thank you for reading and comments, well appreciated
Geezer
Fri, 2024-05-03 10:15
Yo Billy...
The contest is: Write a love poem without using the word love. ~ Geez.
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Clentin
Fri, 2024-05-03 10:21
Sorry. Poem is edited
Sorry. Poem is edited
Geezer
Fri, 2024-05-03 10:53
It's not as beautiful...
as the first one, but definitely within the parameters. ~ Geez.
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Clentin
Fri, 2024-05-03 11:19
Thank you. Romance is not
Thank you. Romance is not always beautiful.
Geezer
Fri, 2024-05-03 15:38
Depends...
on the eye of the beholder. ~ Geez.
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Clentin
Fri, 2024-05-03 16:37
Right on
Right on
RoseBlack
Sat, 2024-05-04 06:32
Short and sweet
Captured the essence of romance beautifully. Well done
~RoseBlack~
Clentin
Sat, 2024-05-04 08:48
Thank you Rose, I appreciate
Thank you Rose, I appreciate your generous comments.