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WINTER NIGHTS
I sing for these cold winter nights
When the entire world seems to be asleep.
For the broken hearted who are still up
The lonely and the forgotten
I used to think life rejected me
That it would continue to beat me down
Every time I tried to rise
There are times I almost gave up
But somehow I held on
Now then a winter night comes along
I cannot sleep so I go outside
To look at the stars and dream
I only have my shirt on so I'm cold
But the night sky is just so beautiful
So quiet and peaceful
I sing for these winter nights
When my heartbeat matches that of the universe
When for just a moment
I am neither lonely nor broken
Dear God, how beautiful it is
To simply be
A. SWANTALALA
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Winter has come to the southern hemisphere. It's only natural it appears in my poetry.
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