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Sing Me A Song
Sing me a song, music man
Sing it like I'm the only one
I've been listening for so long
Every note feels like home
Stolen thoughts
Enraptured by your words
Melodious reverberation
Echoing down my spine
Wrap my soul
In the warmth of your tone
Everything about you
Is where I belong
Style / type:
Free verse
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neopoet
Mon, 2023-03-27 19:01
Neopoet AI
The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
As an AI language model, I don't have personal beliefs or opinions. Nonetheless, I can provide some literary feedback on the poem "Sing Me A Song."
The poem portrays the speaker's desire to be serenaded by the "music man" who can make her feel like the only one. The use of sensory language, such as "melodious reverberation" and "echoing down my spine," creates a vivid and sensory experience for the reader. The poem's theme of finding comfort and belonging in music is relatable and universally appealing.
However, one possible line edit could be changing "Encapsulated by your words" to "Enraptured by your words." The word "encapsulated" implies being trapped or confined, while "enraptured" conveys a sense of being captivated and entranced, which better fits the poem's theme of finding solace in music.
Overall, "Sing Me A Song" is a well-crafted poem that effectively captures the emotional power of music.
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RoseBlack
Mon, 2023-03-27 19:18
Hello again, AI
I am glad you enjoyed this poem! Thank you for the feedback as you hit the nail right on the head.
~RoseBlack~
Geezer
Tue, 2023-03-28 02:00
I felt...
good vibrations from this one. I see a musician, playing an instrument like a harp, guitar, violin or some such stringed instrument that could vibrate throughout one's body. Nice pictures in my head. ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack
Tue, 2023-03-28 03:49
Thanks Geez
It was a feel good write. That feeling of listening to and or watching our favorite songs and musicians and the place it takes us. Especially when we need an escape
~RoseBlack~
Ruby Lord
Tue, 2023-03-28 05:59
Sing me a song
Well written. I liked the rhythm and the flow of the poem. It gave me a sense of belonging to another person, really beautiful x
Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.
RoseBlack
Tue, 2023-03-28 07:12
Thank you Ruby
Glad you enjoyed this!
~RoseBlack~
Rosewood Apothecary
Tue, 2023-03-28 06:30
I feel this
You know it of course. I get emotional listening to music and it is a bodily experience. There’s crying and goosebumps and trance like meditation. It just takes me away from everything else and centers me again. It’s been my refuge for as long as I can remember.
Tim
RoseBlack
Tue, 2023-03-28 07:12
Mine too
But you know that.. I feel it so deeply and the connection to the musicians involved. Music has been my constant companion and the one thing that has never let me down. Glad you liked it.
~RoseBlack~
Seren
Wed, 2023-03-29 05:26
Dearest Carrie
My first love is music. I was a singer long before I was a writer. There is a feeling when I'm singing of a euphoric power welling up in my body. It leaves me feeling like I've left my body. I also get this feeling when I listen to a particularly poignant song. I explained all that because I get that feeling when I read this poem. It's transending and so beautiful.
It's so good to read you again.
Brava!!!
Love and big hugs Jayne xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
RoseBlack
Wed, 2023-03-29 06:07
Hi Jayne
I've missed you. Hope you are well! Music was my first love and I am sure it will be my last. I think I could sing before I could talk. There is such a deep feeling I get from listening singing. Glad you enjoyed
~RoseBlack~