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Her
Are you a mirage,
Or a dream,
Are you the cooling shadow of the moon,
Or the fiery kiss of the sun,
Your piercing kohl painted eyes,
Makes slaves of kings,
And crumbles empires,
With one glance,
Your throne,
Is made of the broken hearts,
Of your begging lovers,
That lay at your feet,
While your sensuous smile,
Grinds to dust,
The envious,
For even they are helpless at seeing you,
He is in love with you,
She is in love with you,
And I am the oasis that you secretly desire.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Rula
Sat, 2023-02-11 03:30
Hello C Wolf
I thought this has many good images for someone who tortures others either intentionally or without being really mean.
I especially like the second stanza and especially the refrence to kohl.
Maybe you'd wish to enter this to one of the Neopoem contests.
Just a suggestion.
Well done!
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C. Wolff
Sat, 2023-02-11 18:02
Thank you so much!!!
Thank you so much!!!
C. Wolff
Sat, 2023-02-11 18:03
Thx!! :)
Thx!! :)
C. Wolff
Sat, 2023-02-11 18:03
Thank you!! :)
Thank you!! :)
RoseBlack
Sat, 2023-02-11 10:56
Wonderful
Sounds like someone who is tormented by their feelings for multiple people even though they really would like to be with just one. Beautifully written.
~RoseBlack~
C. Wolff
Sat, 2023-02-11 18:03
Thx!!! :)
Thx!!! :)
C. Wolff
Sat, 2023-02-11 18:03
Thx!!! :)
Thx!!! :)
Rosewood Apothecary
Sun, 2023-02-12 13:56
So good
Every word is gorgeous.
Tim
C. Wolff
Sun, 2023-02-12 23:16
thx!!
thx!!