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Wolf Moon
Beneath the moon
The foreboding moon
Raven tress and bare skinned
She came...
The beast within him
Raged with anticipation
As he sunk his teeth
Into her nape
Blood oozing from her wounds
Sanguine stains across her breasts
Gently he brushes a claw
Against her vapid cheeks
Now it was only a matter of time
Before their species intertwined
A gutteral howl rose from deep inside
She was now part of his blood
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Seren
Wed, 2023-01-25 22:14
Dear Carrie
Now the lights come on and someone's home lol I can still feel you in your words. But you've come a long way. This is an awesome poem
I don't know why but I thought of Wolf Queen for the title. He's after all chosing
Or Coronation of Wolves
I can't see anything I'd change other than the title maybe. But it's always just a suggestion
Love Always J xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
RoseBlack
Wed, 2023-01-25 22:24
Hi Jayne
Wolf Moon popped into my head before I even wrote any other words...I'm dabbling with dark and tastefully erotic. Glad you enjoyed.
~RoseBlack~
Seren
Wed, 2023-01-25 22:30
Carrie
You pulled it off. It's both tasteful and erotic.
Hugs xx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
RoseBlack
Wed, 2023-01-25 23:49
Hi Kat
I will definitely check it out...and look for more in the Necrotica series...there may be a sequel to this....
~RoseBlack~
RoseBlack
Thu, 2023-01-26 06:20
Hi mark
Thank you for the suggestion. I will go back and look at that last stanza again.
~RoseBlack~
Rosewood Apothecary
Thu, 2023-01-26 06:31
Lycanthrope
Very specific. Cool read. I’m not great at that genre so it’s both foreign and refreshing. The primal aspect of it is subdued with romantic subterfuge and that gives it a nice balance. Allows readers to access the darkness by illuminating it. Maybe it was the full moon. Now as I’m typing this I’m seeing this as scene in a grand play. Maybe I could draw it. I don’t know, but I liked it.
Tim
RoseBlack
Thu, 2023-01-26 08:17
That would be
Awesome if you could draw it. I had images in my head as I wrote it. More to come in this genre...
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Thu, 2023-01-26 06:40
hello Carrie,
the last line does feel a little rough. but I bet if you sleep on it you will figure it out. it s a gorgeous poem, please don't mess with it too much! you wouldn't believe the visuals you conjured up for my hungry mind to feast upon. thank you!
*ever, eddy
*hugs, Cat
*
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RoseBlack
Thu, 2023-01-26 08:19
Made a tiny revision
To last line per marks suggestion below. More to come on this...
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Thu, 2023-01-26 08:24
we are...
so glad that there will be more coming...good work on last line!
*ever, eddy
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
RoseBlack
Thu, 2023-01-26 08:19
Change made
Leaves it open ended for a sequel
~RoseBlack~