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My new year's Resolution
I won't remain the same,
I won't endure the pain,
I won't beg for friendship,
Free to leave or to stay,
I won't send out my emotions,
I will build them a place,
Somewhere beyond the seven oceans,
Far away from people's gaze.
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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Comments
Candlewitch
Sat, 2023-01-07 10:00
hello,
this is very nice...I like the simplistic approach you have taken!
*hugs, Cat
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Hussainy
Sat, 2023-01-07 13:32
Thank you I am grateful
Thank you I am grateful
Rosewood Apothecary
Sat, 2023-01-07 15:36
Excellent
The rhythm and pacing are great. I liked the theme and I think there is a clear thought conveyed here with a definite beginning and end. I really like the ideas about sitting with your feelings instead of reacting and letting them control you. I like the part about not begging for friendship, that’s personal for me at this stage in my life. I’m learning to let things come in their time. This is a really motivating poem.
Tim
Hussainy
Mon, 2023-01-09 16:30
Rosewood
Rosewood
Thank you I really appreciate, truly its better to communicate with oneself than expressing it or complaining unnecessarily
RoseBlack
Fri, 2023-01-13 22:03
Great job
Good flow and good resolutions. Well done.
~RoseBlack~
Hussainy
Thu, 2023-01-19 10:51
Roseblack
Thank you