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Shattered
Thoughts rain down,
To my ears, not a sound,
Some lingering,
Some barely ringing,
Nothing around matters,
A spark and the glass shatters,
A wall that occluded,
Imagined danger eluded,
A barrier no more,
An open door,
To a world so free,
Only needed is a key,
To put away one that glows,
Rise you will, from the lowest of lows.
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Tue, 2023-01-03 05:34
We build up walls
We do this for survival. Survival mode is exhausting and eventually the walls must be broken down. This is painful as it requires a person to take a really hard honest look at themselves. It’s time to live now not merely survive.
The poem is great in meter and rhyme. Loosely structured like a sonnet but not really.
Thanks for sharing,
Tim
Dystopia
Wed, 2023-01-04 00:43
Thanks Tim!
Thanks Tim!
Candlewitch
Wed, 2023-01-04 08:21
*smiles :)
a unique poem that freely flows in words and meaning! I like it very much!
*hugs, Cat
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Dystopia
Wed, 2023-01-04 11:48
Thanks Cat! Much appreciated!
Thanks Cat! Much appreciated!
lovedly
Thu, 2023-01-05 00:37
a unique sonnetry
song cum poetry
very soothing and lovely
Dystopia
Thu, 2023-01-05 10:11
Thanks lovedly! Your visit is
Thanks lovedly! Your visit is always appreciated!
Rula
Sat, 2023-01-07 14:11
Love the ending
the last line works so well for me, and a good message too.
Thank you for sharing.
Best wishes
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