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Murder Me Not (Round Robin Part 1)
A sliver of silver through the sheers,
faint breeze tickling my nose
dream sequence abandoning me
as the nightmare begins to unfold
I didn't hear him coming
feet that never made a sound
all I remember is his hot breath upon my neck
callous fingers that took hold
claw marks decorated his face, dripping all my rage
through bloody eyes, it was hard for him to see
what i pulled out from under my pillow
what could it be
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words:
Here is my attempt at beginning a Round Robin :) Enjoy!
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Thu, 2022-07-28 19:53
Alright
That ought to do. You left a perfectly answerable question. I think this goes to Mark?
RoseBlack
Thu, 2022-07-28 20:36
Figured a good pick up point
Leaves room for creativity and to flip the script if need be
~RoseBlack~
Rosewood Apothecary
Thu, 2022-07-28 20:49
Are we even conscious
That is the question…
RoseBlack
Thu, 2022-07-28 21:02
I don't know
Are we?
~RoseBlack~
RoseBlack
Fri, 2022-07-29 00:45
I can't wait to see
What it is!!! I'm on the edge of my seat
~RoseBlack~
RoseBlack
Fri, 2022-07-29 07:30
The hose
Was a good surprise! A step away from our traditional methods of murder! You did great.
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-07-29 07:08
dear RB,
what you have here is a very good start! I love the suspenseful footprints you have left for Mark to follow. I hope I can do as well. am I after Mark?
always, Cat
ever, eddy
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RoseBlack
Fri, 2022-07-29 07:31
Hi Cat
I am not sure whose next. May need to check with Gee?
~RoseBlack~
Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-07-29 07:35
I just
sent him a p.m. I'm nervous...
*hugs, Cat
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Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-07-29 14:58
I submitted mine...
this morning. so...is it back to Geezer or does he start a new one?
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Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-07-29 15:23
dear Mark,
that's ok with me. I don't think we have a deadline.
*hugs, Cat
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Rosewood Apothecary
Fri, 2022-07-29 17:09
I’m waiting on Geezer
He’s next then I finish was the plan. Mark starts next round