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Here I sit and here I stare
Here I sit
and here I stare.
Watching the
clouds glide
across the air.
No more worries
no more cares .
Leaving my
soul to soar
up god's
golden stairs.
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Comments
Geezer
Thu, 2021-06-03 12:09
Sounds as though...
you are looking at the sky. Very nice; only one thing to fix; [god's]. ~ Geez.
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Electric Blue
Sun, 2021-06-06 13:34
Here I sit and Stare
Edward
In that place i seem to be after loosing so many.
I liked the flow
It spoke to me
Electric blue
Electric Blue
Arrow
Mon, 2021-06-07 14:27
Flow
I think this might flow better if you ended lines on strong words, rather than weak words. For example:
Here I sit
(and) here I stare.
Watching the (clouds glide)
This is a nice, simple, meditative piece, which could be enhanced with less choppiness.