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A Happy Reading
She moves in sultry undertones
fondles edges as she reads ...
her lips form sex in every word
the smile from her eye
says she knows I know ...
her fine neck-hair dances
in soft lights reflection
and I am given to hunger ...
need starts thumping
and I must listen;
statued to her being ...
my face begins to quiver
while breathing her voice
in quakes and tremors.
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Comments
Kailashana2
Mon, 2011-02-14 08:53
ooooh la la, moonman! she's
ooooh la la, moonman! she's got you under your parchment skin. ;-)
"statued to her being"..... what a line! "She moves in sultry undertones
fondling the edges as she reads ..." what an opening line to your poem!
~A
themoonman
Tue, 2011-02-15 07:22
Hi Anna ...
yes she does !
Nordic cloud
Mon, 2011-02-14 13:44
Seduction
beautifully described moonman,
"need starts thumping
and I must listen
statued to her being ..."
So subtle, so well put in poetry.
Love Ann.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
themoonman
Tue, 2011-02-15 07:24
Hello Ann ...
so glad you liked it ... hoping things are good for you,
and your window still holds magic ...
Richard
scribbler
Tue, 2011-02-15 08:30
hello Richard
The only thing "wrong" with your poem is now you'll get the ladies started taunting us poor ol' guys lol.A good passionate write without being explicit................scribbler
Kailashana2
Tue, 2011-02-15 08:34
Deal with it, Stan, deal with
Deal with it, Stan, deal with it!
Smile.
~A
themoonman
Wed, 2011-02-16 04:33
Thank you Stan ...
and Anna, ya'll had this old man grinning
mand
Wed, 2011-02-16 08:20
Hi Richard
Everyone's said it all, just to say I agree with them. Passionate and beautifully written.
Love Mand xxxxxx