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The sweet silver swallow
The sweet silver swallow
flys for tomorrow
Trying to leave all
It’s sorrow
behind.
For it soars
Towards the sun’s
Scintillating
Gates that holds
The stream of
future’ hopes.
and all
Past’s unaccomplished
Completely demolished
Dreams.
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c lynn brooks
Mon, 2020-10-12 17:01
Edward
well now what an improvement I see in your use of stanzas your poem is just lovely title is strong and your first line pulls that reader in to want to continue reading. well done!!
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Edward nigma
Mon, 2020-10-12 17:34
Thank you
I hope your doing fine in this horrid time of mass hysteria
Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.
Edward nigma
Tue, 2020-10-13 10:27
thank you
i hope your doing fine in this horrid time of mass hysteria
Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.