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Who Am I, Even?

Submitted by Punkyfrewster on Sat, 2024-07-20 18:10

I look in my
purse, and my
wallet is missing.

I sit down to
give it a more
thorough look.

The wallet is lost.
An existential
crisis arises.

No license.
No pictures.
No credit cards.

I grapple with
who I am
and if I am.

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07/24 Lost My Wallet
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neopoet

Sun, 2024-07-21 00:10

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Your poem "Who Am I, Even?" effectively conveys a sense of disorientation and introspection through the simple act of losing a wallet. The progression from a mundane situation to a deeper existential crisis is well-crafted. The repetition of "No" in the last stanza emphasizes the loss and confusion experienced by the speaker. To enhance the impact of the poem, consider exploring more vivid imagery or sensory details to immerse the reader further into the speaker's emotional journey. Additionally, you may want to experiment with varying line lengths or stanza structures to create a more dynamic flow in the poem.

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RoseBlack

Sat, 2024-07-20 22:05

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With identity and who we are, where we belong...our wallet holds our identity in the form of plastic but we still question who we are on the inside. Well done.

~RoseBlack~

Lavender

Sat, 2024-07-20 23:43

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Hello, Punky,
Yes! An annoyance, for certain. But to get along in the world, we need all those indentifiers to function - the bank, the license branch, the airport. Yet, our true "who we are" is, of course, much more. Really enjoyed this!
Thank you!
L

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