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Water Nymphs
In waters deep,
I did forgo,
My worldly life,
As they bestowed,
Upon my tender heart,
Their love,
A fond farewell,
To the world above,
So in their arms,
At their behest,
I gave my love,
For eternal rest.
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Lured into the deep.
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Fri, 2022-07-22 15:08
As old school...
as any I've heard lately. I love the simple flow and the language fits perfectly! Nothing I could add, would make this better.~ Geezer.
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C. Wolff
Fri, 2022-07-22 15:45
thx! :)
thx! :)
Jackweb
Fri, 2022-07-22 15:39
I love this piece!
The simplicity is very catchy! I would say, you did a very fine work.
Beautiful!
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~Jackweb
C. Wolff
Fri, 2022-07-22 15:48
Thx! Appreciate the kind
Thx! Appreciate the kind words :)
scribbler
Fri, 2022-07-22 17:02
Hi
I like how you saved the rhyme until the end to give emphasis
C. Wolff
Fri, 2022-07-22 18:27
Thx!
Thx!
Rosewood Apothecary
Fri, 2022-07-22 19:16
Sirens
Just amazing. So many images come to mind. This has been written about and captured in recorded music countless times since before humans wrote stuff down. I love it. Geezer is correct, I would not mess with this, I’d just convolute it.
Really impressed,
Tim
C. Wolff
Fri, 2022-07-22 20:51
Thank you so much! :)
Thank you so much! :)
RoseBlack
Sat, 2022-07-23 01:02
A simple
Elegant write. Wouldn't change a thing.
~RoseBlack~
C. Wolff
Sat, 2022-07-23 01:05
Thanks!
Thanks!
Candlewitch
Sat, 2022-07-23 05:16
Just beautiful...
Encore?
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C. Wolff
Sat, 2022-07-23 17:57
Thanks!
Thanks!