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water beds (my first haiku)
fish finished fucking,
both breathless and soaked, must one
sleep in the dry spot?
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Comments
BettyBuff
Mon, 2013-01-21 04:28
hahahahaahaha
Genuinely laughed out loud to this...clever.
Ells
Jenifer James
Mon, 2013-01-21 05:19
Very, very clever. I winced!
Very, very clever. I winced!
Jenifer Jaspa James
weirdelf
Mon, 2013-01-21 06:51
Cool!
and steamy.
Love it.
And reminded of why WC Fields claimed he never drank water "fish fuck in it"
cheers,
Jess
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themoonman
Mon, 2013-01-21 06:47
loved it ...
and here we are thinking water beds are cool
great imagery and focus here, title couldn't have
been better, a truly unique poem.
thanks for posting !!!
Frenchf
Mon, 2013-01-21 14:04
Do fish have a dry spot?
Soo pithily funny!
Seren
Tue, 2013-01-22 06:27
I laughed out loud I love
I laughed out loud I love this one
Bravo
Love Jc xxx
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