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View from the lens
Looking rather like
A rotationally challenged pair
Of the reddest veined breasts
I gaze back into my rendered
Retinas, which are healthy
And good, I guess, since childhood
Deigned them only a short
Focal length, shorter than my
Memory of anatomy
As retinas go. Blindingly obvious
The parallels with trees and roots
Or things with roots that see
Faintly tracing back a path
Through blood to something core
And bright as a disk
A moon, perhaps? A shrouded Sun
Lost in the retinue fog, a swirling
Orange mass, a corona ring
Of visions past, flash – illuminated
For a nanosecond in the dark universe
Of the optometrists chair
He, the beholder of my eye
lies, and tells me to thicken
my rims with paper thin hope
I grope through the darkness
for there, somewhere is
bifocal light
Comments
Ian.T
Mon, 2013-11-25 03:58
Van
I had one of those done a few years ago and they sent for me wanting me to have it done again, as I waited for the results.
They saw what they thought was a black spot on the retina.
It turned out to be on the lens of the camera or what ever they used to take the pic, lol
A very descriptive write and was good, Yours Ian.T.
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
vandiemenspeak
Wed, 2013-11-27 05:58
Thanks Ian!
A concerted effort will be made to use the tools and add revisions etc. Glad you liked the imagery, my optometrist is the absolute spitting image of a younger Phillip Larkin, I swear! Of course that retina is all important for every image isn't it? Glad your 'black spot' was a false alarm! Inspiration for another verse perhaps?
Cheers.
Chris.
Chris Hall - Tasmania
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