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The Valley of Vision
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the 'Valley of Vision' - the plains of derision
has caught my eye - ripping out my bossom
lay captive my heart - tethering claws
captured my wandering mind - releasing nether the vagabond
your cup sends me reeling - tumbling venom-drenched
a haughty tower trembling - quivering in the night cold
never again to be rebuilt - ever awash on the shore
two men once hung from a tree - condemnation rife
the one cursed his life upon himself - excluded realities
the other condemned eternally - for him accursed vindication
neither the valley nor in the plain - hope prescribe
did the eye cast its mark - vision bright become
felled by projectile true - delight, darkened demise
a day no one can rue - smite the wanderlust of hope
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loved
Fri, 2011-01-07 09:05
Your title VALLEY
put me aghast
how did u know
all about my valley???
i thought you were being visionary ,
i was earlier known as
vision
as PERHAPS
knowest thee.
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crypticbard
Sat, 2011-01-08 06:40
I did not know
I just wrote that poem several years ago
without any knowledge of you or that vision
it could be any one's and everyone's vision - this poem
for each human on the planet has their own vision or two.
I am glad though that you have read and responded to this poem.
Cheers.
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'write on! let these words free.'
loved
Sun, 2011-01-16 10:13
THANKS
REGARDS FROM VISION
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Hooded Stranger
Mon, 2011-01-17 18:21
CB
CB,
you always manage to write something that makes me stop in my tracks and read again in wonder.
You know I like structure and you have yet again offered a new structure with each line and the use of a dash - that adds something extra to the whole piece without stopping its flow.
Really liked the lines at the beginning being summarised in your own (off-centred) world at the end of each line.
Truly a master of structure.
A great read my friend,
HS ps. apologies for not commenting on your work recently - I've been a busy bee!
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crypticbard
Thu, 2011-01-20 09:31
Many thanks HS
I deeply appreciate your visits and interaction/comments on my poems. Hope you don't ever tire. CB
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'write on! let these words free.'