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Subjectivity
"The beauty of subjectivity
Is everybody gains.
It makes the bars of captivity
Decorated window panes.
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Last few words:
I had a program recently with a group of writers. It was called "Writer's Block Unlocked." I tried to write a poem in response to a poem prompt. I failed. This is all I could come up with.
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Comments
Geezer
Mon, 2012-03-05 20:30
I would love...
to see this expanded upon. It stands well on the few lines that you have written, but you could do well to think about how those decorated window panes might affect someone looking at or through them. ~ Gee
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William Saint George
Tue, 2012-04-10 12:35
That will be saved for a much
That will be saved for a much more thorough piece. I'v found that appending to my older poems leaves me with an incomplete feeling. Will look at it. Thanks.
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Eduardo Cruz
Mon, 2012-03-05 20:55
Perfect!!
I fuck'en love this, how simple and thought provoking. Damnnnn!
Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
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William Saint George
Tue, 2012-04-10 12:35
Thanks Eddie. U're very
Thanks Eddie. U're very welcome. Didn't have much time to reply earlier.
Short poems work well for me, especially when they neatly bottle up everything that's to be said. :D
No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot
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wesley snow
Tue, 2012-03-06 21:12
I'm with Eddie.
This is curious as is. wesley
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William Saint George
Tue, 2012-04-10 12:36
Thanks Wes!
Thanks Wes!
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