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The Snail Woman
There is a special kind of woman out there,
She glitters in the sunlight,
Shimmering like precious metals,
Soft like wet velvet,
Her gentle gaze comes from
two sets of lovely eyes,
Elegant movements that
seem to slow time,
An alluring motion,
A precious armour resting on her body,
Rounded edges spiralling into her,
Hypnotic lines dance as she glides,
A magical spellbinding dance,
Entranced by her beauty,
You move closer…
… Be fearful and cautious,
While your garden snails
may be friendly enough,
The snail woman is not kind,
She is a cruel temptress,
Devouring poor travellers
who mistake her beauty
for anything but a pretty trap,
Her mouth is filled with
a thousand small teeth,
She will leave to bone untouched,
No scab of flesh,
The snail woman consumes
all who cross her beautiful path.
So beware this mythical beauty
Will lead you to a very real end.
Comments
Seren
Mon, 2023-02-20 11:49
Dear Taliesin The Modern Bard
Welcome to Neopoet! this is an amazing poem, I will never look at snails the same way again!
WOW!!! I am blown away this is brilliant, I think you should enter it in the new member contest for the month as you are a new member, you're eligible.
If you need anything or have questions, please contact any of the advocates or myself as I am Director of Community Outreach.
I look forward to reading more of your poetry this is so good!
Kind Regards Seren
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Taliesin The Mo...
Sun, 2023-02-26 17:59
Thank you very kindly. I
Thank you very kindly. I believe i have submitted it to one of the contests to fingers crossed.
Fox
Obadiah Grey
Mon, 2023-02-20 11:51
I think I'd risk it,,,
I think I'd risk it,,,
yeah,
I'd definitely risk it !!
Welcome to Neo.
I believe you'll do just fine here,
enjoyed your piece and thought it interesting!
Obi.
Seren
Mon, 2023-02-20 11:57
Obi!!
I just spat coke on the keyboard lmao.
hugs x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Geezer
Mon, 2023-02-20 12:12
Snails...
I like everything about this one!
It has mystery and bizarre beauty, along with a certain playfullness
until the Snail Woman shows her true self!
The title is good, the theme is interesting, and the end is great!
Looking forward to seeing more of your posts! ~ Geezer.
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Rosewood Apothecary
Mon, 2023-02-20 19:37
Welcome
Welcome to neopoet. That is quite odd. What a horrific observation. Around here the garden snail only devour my greens and the like. The slugs are worse. They like hosta leaves a lot.
I don’t want to meet this snail woman. It was plenty fanciful reading about this creation of your boundless imagination.
Welcome again
Tim
Jackweb
Fri, 2023-02-24 22:45
Allegorical poems
tries to interpret and reveal the hidden meaning of a story. Wow, this is a prominent composition. I now have a new point of view about snails.
Great job!
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~Jackweb