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Shelter in the Rain
On the phone she tells me
she looks forward to the rain.
She mentions that she forgot her umbrella
again, but she’ll be okay without it.
And would I be kind enough to bring in her book
left outside on the table. Fretting in jest
that the author may not forgive if I don’t hurry,
and refuse her the denouement she hopes for.
I wonder, once more, if it’s forgetfulness.
Does she worry I’ll think she’s foolish or laughable
because she’s neglected to bring an umbrella again?
It’s not any of that. I can hear it in her voice
as she’s walking in the downpour;
the rain chasing away the blue of her black.
Obviously, I remind myself,
it’s not about forgetfulness at all.
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Comments
Lavender
Thu, 2024-01-11 18:33
Shelter in the Rain
Hello, Michael,
"...the rain chasing away the blue of her black." I love your poetry! Another tender poem.
Thank you,
L
A couple typos, I believe: Denouncement and It's not any of that...
Michael Anthony
Fri, 2024-01-12 11:09
Thanks L! Always appreciate
Thanks L! Always appreciate you stopping by. Not sure I follow your comments about the typos. Denouement seems to be the correct word, as it means the final resolution of a literary work - i.e. the book referered to in the stanza. Curious also about what you saw wrong with "It's not any of that." Hope the new year is off to a good start for you and yours!
Best
Michael Anthony
Lavender
Fri, 2024-01-12 13:17
Hello, Michael,
I'm so sorry! I was not familiar with the word denouement...resolution! Always grateful to learn something new!
I believe the "It's" is missing a "t".
Thank you for your wonderful poetry...and your literary knowledge!
L
Michael Anthony
Fri, 2024-01-12 18:31
Thanks L! Missed that typo,
Thanks L! Missed that typo, for sure!
Best
Michael Anthony
MermaidMaster
Sun, 2024-01-14 22:33
wonderful!!
this poem is utterly delightful. i enjoyed reading it so much i went back and read it again. thank you so much for sharing!!
<3
Michael Anthony
Mon, 2024-01-15 10:16
Thanks for the kind words MM!
Thanks for the kind words MM!
Best
Michael Anthony