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Self Perception
Lonely
I can't be without a crowd
Alone
I can even be a cloud
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
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Comments
chevyvent
Wed, 2018-12-05 13:56
Very Good Work Loving This
Well, you have most assuredly gotten a few interesting points across. I can see where you are very analytical in your approach and that is something I rarely come across and welcome. Your work, from what I have read, is a mixture of intellectual, abstract and sometimes whimsical tenant. This too, is rare, in my estimation and a different avenue of attack. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.
Mario Vitale
raj
Thu, 2018-12-06 04:09
Thanks Mario
for reading and your comment..
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raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Thu, 2018-12-06 04:14
some thing is great about this
crowd on earth
cloud in heavens
raj
Thu, 2018-12-06 04:38
Thanks Lovedly
for reading
crowd here is in the context that one feels lonely if going unnoticed in a crowd
even be a cloud is in the context that being alone one is free to fantasize or also as feel on top of the world
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raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Thu, 2018-12-06 06:51
it is always difficult to comprehend
what was in the mind
of the poet at that time
each one has freedom
for one's own opinion/vision
unless the poet says
what he wants to in prose as explanation
Thanks raj ur educated
I am just learning
the poetic abacus
Rula
Thu, 2018-12-06 12:31
Dear raj
I believe the beauty of this is that it can be read differently and interpreted differently.
I thought the cloud thing has an advantage over being among the noisy crowd though I know this is not your intention.
I like nevertheless its being succinct.
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raj
Fri, 2018-12-07 04:22
Hi Rula
your interpretation is also valid...thanks for reading...
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raj (sublime_ocean)