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Redwood Counselors
I didn't earn it at first.
Love was like wind.
I could sense it all around her,
but I could not see any use for it.
Still, with patience, we walked
in tall stands of trees together.
Ones that had been there for so long,
red-barked and towering with wisdom.
The branches quivered and stirred
as we passed their anchored homes.
Murmurs perhaps, of their discontent with me.
I reached out to feel the deep crevices
furrowed in the rough and weathered bark.
Counsel, it seemed, for a fool.
The Redwoods all around us whispered
through a restless and knowing breeze,
“Let her in and don’t look back.”
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neopoet
Fri, 2023-05-19 09:37
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Lavender
Mon, 2023-05-22 15:32
Redwood Counselors
Hello, Michael.
Wise counseling, indeed! "I reached out to feel the deep crevices..." This entire stanza brings me comfort and love. I can feel it as I read your beautiful poetry.
Thank you!
L
Michael Anthony
Thu, 2023-05-25 08:49
Very kind L, thank you.
Very kind L, thank you. ALWAYS appreciate your comments.
Best
Michael Anthony