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A Precious Glimpse
Rambling rants of a disturbed mind
genius in his day, one of a kind
fighting against some archenemy
flailing and arguing continuously
family visit heartbroken
in their eyes, no need to be spoken
on a good day he just ignores
their presence, one of his chores
on a bad day swearing and cursing
a painted smile they've been rehearsing
the man they knew is long gone
but in their soul, his memory shone
they keep hoping for a breakthrough
a precious glimpse of the person they knew
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Comments
Roscoe Lane
Sun, 2012-12-16 06:00
Effective poem,
Effective poem, but i think your close to making it a very good poem. Just a bit more work i think. Love Roscoe..
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
sueb
Sun, 2012-12-16 06:23
thanks for reading and
thanks for reading and comment x