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I'm just any others
day's dream
they can see
yet
at night those who dream too
get wet
despite the snow
the hour of meeting me
the sun has to
beget
yet
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
the hungry poeyet
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Race_9togo
Wed, 2022-02-02 14:03
Not bad.
I'd like to see "yet" at the end of the first stanza, though.
Respectfully, Race
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lovedly
Wed, 2022-02-02 15:24
thaks Race
With grace
Ray Whitaker
Wed, 2022-02-02 19:24
Use of the stanza lines appeals to me
The 4-3-4 line stanzas work for me. Effective use of white space…
Don’t know what relation the title has to the poem…
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lovedly
Wed, 2022-02-02 21:43
Basically Ray
this verse is as an answer to a stupider verse
some poet conversed thanks
anyway