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Night's Beauty Rare's True Colors
I caught you in the afterglow
excitedly I squirmed,
a nervous cough
all bets are off
my suspicions are confirmed.
So now, that I am wondering
just what you're going to do,
I packed your stuff
it's going to be rough
guess you didn't think things through.
Fall and winter are coming soon
repeatedly I've said,
don't steal from me
and then, I see
my possessions hidden under the bed!
I thought I saw your shadow glow
so, I hurried to lock the door,
not a big surprise
now, I realize
I don't even like you, anymore.
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Structured: Western
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Comments
Ian.T
Sat, 2012-09-15 03:57
Doc
A great fun write and well put together..
A typical Doc write, and still polished with wit,
Yours Ian.T
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