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My Conversation with a Famous Poet

Submitted by Mr joghe on Wed, 2024-07-17 20:13

This weighted aroma of ink;
Sent a word to me on my bed several nights.
Its tears flew on the transcendent book
Where in this world will I find and fix the lines and verses of Shakespeare?
Is it on the dusty board in the societies?
Where smugness is the motto
And dirt coats the norms
Where readers have become the viewers of book covers
And the world has made the ink a pushover
To run-off a genre of their tastes.
I have learnt my lesson from John Milton that the paradise lost can be regained.

What is the ink?
It is the heart that conveys the meaning
And the meanings are the fingers of the ink;
That move on the white paper.
The priceless ink in the world
That holds my heart.
I have presented it to my kinsmen like Harry Potter
But it was rejected
Maybe tomorrow, they will search for its scraps.
Wole Soyinka smiled and said, 'it is culture.'

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neopoet

Thu, 2024-07-18 02:13

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "My Conversation with a Famous Poet" delves into the essence of writing, the value of ink as a medium of expression, and the challenges faced by contemporary literature. The imagery of ink as a conveyer of meaning and emotion is vivid and evocative. The references to renowned literary figures like Shakespeare, John Milton, and Wole Soyinka add depth to the poem.

One suggestion for improvement would be to work on the flow and structure of the poem. Some lines feel disjointed and could benefit from smoother transitions between ideas. Additionally, consider refining the metaphors and symbols used to enhance the overall coherence of the piece.

Furthermore, exploring the themes of rejection and acceptance in more detail could add layers to the poem. How does the rejection of the ink by the speaker's kinsmen reflect broader societal attitudes towards creativity and art? Delving deeper into this aspect could enrich the message of the poem.

Overall, the poem shows promise in its exploration of the power of writing and

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Lavender

Thu, 2024-07-18 07:10

My Conversation...

Hello, Mr Joghe,
This has a sad element to it, a dismissive feeling toward the written word. I'd like to know more about the line, "Where readers become the viewers of book covers." Possibly meaning books are not opened and read? I was not familiar with Wole Soyinka until reading your poem. His voice adds so much to your words. I'll be back to read again after your response.
Thank you,
L

Mr joghe

Thu, 2024-07-18 20:00

Dear poet

Thanks to Lavender

"Words are currency of ideas and have the power to change world. Ride your pen on the rough road."

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Mary Beth Magee

Wed, 2024-07-31 16:42

Touching imagery

Your message draws me in.

Thank you,
Mary Beth

Because your words have touched my heart,
I stopped to share a little part.
Be nice, supportive, kind to all
As we walk through this Poetry Hall.

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My Conversation with a Famous Poet