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Illusion [Sunku]
Trudging
through sand storm
with parched lips
Listless
eyes no more
trust a mirage
Only
goosebumps hint
an Oasis
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Last few words:
An attempt to express more through fewer words in Sunku Form.the emerging new form of poetry which I am actively promoting through my efforts however little they may be
Editing stage:
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Comments
IRiz
Sat, 2018-03-17 18:25
Scary dream, my friend!
Scary dream, my friend!
IRiz
raj
Sat, 2018-03-17 23:57
Thanks IRiz for the read and
Thanks IRiz for the read and comment
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raj (sublime_ocean)
fink555
Sat, 2018-03-24 18:13
Excellent
This is a dream transcription? Has an ethereal, uncomplicated air.
raj
Sun, 2018-03-25 05:04
Thank you for the read
Thank you for the read and appreciative comment....
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raj (sublime_ocean)