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THE IDEAL WOMAN
How beautiful is your heart so clean
I'll forever rest in the arms of your love
gazing into your eyes electrifies me
I'm now fully charged with longing
you're the ideal woman I have long for
your awesomeness is incomparable
my dream has finally come to fruition
I'm now boasting like a lion's manes
I've sincerely taken a dominion of love
nothing else could stop this friendship
we're formidable - no one can break us
for the unity of love binds us in great joy
lets love lead us a million mile away
I'm assuring you; we'll never breakdown
the strength of our love is unceasing
we'll get to our desired destination
©® ONYINYECHI COSMOS ETU
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Rosewood Apothecary
Mon, 2022-10-10 14:56
It’s a bold profession
Man. I walk around speaking this way to my wife and boy do I make sure my children hear it, even when she’s not around.
Beautiful
Tim
Jackweb
Mon, 2022-10-10 16:28
Wow!!
That's a good way to live! Thanks for reading and commenting.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Jackweb
Mon, 2022-10-10 16:29
Wow!!
That's a good way to live! Thanks for reading and commenting.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Lavender
Mon, 2022-10-10 20:11
The Ideal Woman
Hi, Jackweb,
Strong devotion. Feels very much like it could be recited as wedding vows.
L
Jackweb
Tue, 2022-10-11 03:46
Wow!!
That's true. Thanks so much!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb