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A Gun
A gun cause’s harm
To the innocent
Give justice to the guilty
Not so much the gun, but
The soul behind the gun
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Victorclaude
Tue, 2010-12-14 01:49
justice
justice
justice kidnapped
hidden in law
sells cement shoes
for our children
to wear
on prom night
what is hidden?
ask your children.
"When a pickpocket meets a holy man all he sees are his pockets."
Unknown (at least to me)
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2010-12-15 00:58
Interesting comment about justice
I see the truth in this comment.
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Eduardo Cruz
Tue, 2010-12-14 03:35
Barbara
To me if you have to use a gun to harm the innocent, your soul is already lost..
always Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2010-12-15 01:02
I second that
Thanks for the comment. It is much appreciated.
Always
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mand
Tue, 2010-12-14 05:27
Alot said in a few words. It
Alot said in a few words. It's not the gun, it's the person behind the gun and there motives.
Interesting poem
Loads of love
Mand xxxxxxxxxx
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2010-12-15 01:08
A few words
I like creating a poetic picture with as few words as I can. Thanks for the comment. I really appreciate your thoughts on my poem.
Loads of love
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