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Difference
Do something different-
It makes a difference;
Nothing can ever
Be the same.
Some folks just love to give, and I’d love it too,
But I’d really just love to have something to give.
I’d just love to give my heart,
but I haven’t got the heart to give.
I’d give you a piece of my mind, but….
Give it time and in time I’ll give,
but I just haven’t got the time.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Clobro
Wed, 2023-01-25 13:53
repetition
It's kind of hypnotic, and your rhythm is good!
I feel like the stanzas don't have much to do with each other, though. What do you mean by nothing can ever be the same?
Very interesting.
Rosewood Apothecary
Wed, 2023-01-25 18:06
Theme and variation
In music we do this. We take a theme and keep adding different variations with each subsequent pass. Jazz musicians especially have mastered this.
Jazz poet
I liked it. It was hypnotic.
Tim
Candlewitch
Thu, 2023-01-26 08:57
hello poet,
amazing!
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Seren
Thu, 2023-01-26 11:05
Dear Johnny Two Birds
To me this feels like a story from long ago. Retold and with each telling it changes form. A mantra of sorts.
Really well done!!
Nice to meet you
Kind regards Jayne-Chloe
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Jackweb
Thu, 2023-01-26 16:04
Very beautiful
A very thoughtful piece! I got the message of the poem. Well done!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
RoseBlack
Fri, 2023-01-27 10:08
I agree with all of the above
The repetition was hypnotic...well done.
~RoseBlack~