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Broken Heart
A heart never broken
pristine and sterile
I pity their perfection
their memories futile
An unbroken heart
has not life experience
has not taken part
never suffered a grievance
A broken heart is a lesson
hard to learn but needed
its a beautiful blessing
hopefully not oft repeated
A broken heart gives us
strength and compassion
empathy a welcome plus
wearing it on my sleeve, fashion
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage:
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Comments
Seren
Sat, 2013-02-09 05:40
Hi Sue
I must be getting jaded and old I just didn't like the theme
I can't see a broken heart as a beautiful blessing
The rhyme felt forced I can't offer anything constructive
Maybe rewrite with less forced rhyme
Hugs Jc x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
sueb
Sat, 2013-02-09 06:38
thanks jc for reading no
thanks jc for reading no problem have a great weekend x