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BLOSSOMS' BANE
Sunshine through new leaves
Far crow fussing at bored hawk
cut short by my sneeze
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
It had been too long since I wrote a Haiku
Editing stage:
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Comments
Seren
Tue, 2019-04-30 12:02
Bro
I heard that sneeze and saw fluttering wings.
This one is a little bit of fun on the surface. But its a sneaky bugger. Implants images.
I love it.
Love always Sis.
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
scribbler
Tue, 2019-04-30 14:30
LOL
"Sneaky" good huh". Well I should sneeze more lol........stan
Seren
Tue, 2019-04-30 16:20
Hahaha Sneeze or not ?
I've never read a poem that you've written ?that doesnt provide imagry. Sneaky *real good* lol
Hugs x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
scribbler
Tue, 2019-04-30 18:29
lol
To sneeze or not to sneeze, that is the question
Geezer
Tue, 2019-04-30 15:12
Damn...
that was good! Trouble is, that one just ain't enough, like Lay's potato- chips. ~ Gee.
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scribbler
Tue, 2019-04-30 18:31
Hi Geeze
Seems the less I write in a poem the better people like it.......hmmmm........
Geezer
Wed, 2019-05-01 10:58
It was not...
my implication, that you should write less in your poems, only that you should write more Haiku. Maybe a string of them in one set?
~ Gee.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
scribbler
Wed, 2019-05-01 14:36
I was just
poking fun at myself. Been a Long time since I did a haiku series.....maybe time to think up another one........