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The Blinder Side of Fate
I've made my choice
as to where I stand,
I've greatly considered the source;
I sure hope things
turn out...as planned;
we must stay true, the course.
I have completed
each, and every detail,
things should go - without a "hitch";
we all must "focus"
and not, derail;
good intentions, could land us in a ditch!
We co-operated
quite stellerrlally,
to get everything under, way;
we checked everything out
not once, twice, but thrice;
and nothing, gave a minute of "play".
We purchased it all
way, in advance,
and our "checklist" was completely done;
all warnings, given
and advice, we will heed
'tis now, that our journey's begun.
We'll put all our efforts
to the "test"
moving forward, as on we go;
still trying to learn
as I try and best the rest,
tells me how little I know.
We'll pause to pray
and hopefully, find favor
in a chapter from the gods;
with precision efforts
we will suffer the "win",
I hope "fate", can calculate the odds.
Comments
wesley snow
Sun, 2011-10-09 14:21
I take back most of what I said.
This is not only different from your recent fair, but well put together and moving. I recognize this poet.
I have a weird question and if you're not too mad at me already to answer I would love one. I note a great deal of commas in places through many of your poems where I would not use them. No master of grammar and punctuation am I, but I think I have a pretty good idea of the rules. Occasionally they seem used to add an extra "trick" (so to speak) to a phrase. However, many are to my eyes somewhat superfluous. Is there reason behind your madness.
Again, this is an excellent and more to the reason I read you in the first place.
wesley
W. H. Snow
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docmaverick
Mon, 2011-10-10 15:22
...and you must realize, Wes....
...that I cherish each, and everyone of your comments, no matter how you critique my poetry effort, that's under scrutiny....at the time!
As a matter of fact....I genuinely, am actually interested in your remarks; because of the legitimacy of your candidity !
Thanx, and have yourself both....a day, and an evening !
sincerely,
doc.
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