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THE ASTER RISK
The asterisk rates
a stare; some tears.
As petals fall, what letters hide?
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Comments
Geezer
Sat, 2022-02-05 10:23
While it's not...
a common thing to see this word on Neo. it is not a taboo thing either. I don't think that it even falls under the explicit rule
either. There may be someone who objects, but if they do, it is of no real consequence. I'm not sure of the intended words spelled by the asterisks or the letters they are intended to replace but found the story behind them humorous. ~ Geezer.
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Entend2u
Sat, 2022-02-05 10:32
Thanks Geezer
Thanks Geezer
The asterisks are the petals falling from the Aster.
Geezer
Sat, 2022-02-05 20:48
Hmmmm...
I get it now.
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Entend2u
Sun, 2022-02-06 06:15
also "rates" "stare" and
also "rates" "stare" and "tears" are anagrams of "aster" (:-)
Geezer
Sun, 2022-02-06 08:59
I would imagine...
that if you hadn't told me, I would never have thought it! Of course, I don't spend a lot of time getting that deeply into a poem,
and analyzing it to that extent. ~ Geezer.
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Breakinglogic
Mon, 2022-02-07 15:25
Entend2u,
Entend2u,
The title really earned the click.
I appreciate the formatting and details in your poem.
While I need some convincing of the connection between flowers, or their petals, and your topic, I do enjoy the word play of aster-risk! The title feels very high-stakes:)
Do I like anagrams? Yes, I like anagrams! It seems your message may be to give the ASTERisk A REST! :D
Overall, I really enjoyed!
☆ raffy
Entend2u
Tue, 2022-02-08 05:40
Hi Raffy
Hi Raffy
"Give the Aster Risk arrest!" - love it. Just one last word - when I realised that "aster" had some useful anagrams and given that I was attempting a Haiku I resolved that I had to use the anagrams. This was good because it meant I kept the poem really tight and confined.
Another last word - I have been trying for years to write an acrostic entitled "A Cross Stick To Beat Me With" and, sure enough, it has beaten me every time. Still trying.
Will