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arch
under the arch
the darkness flows
and the river thrives
alive fringed with
ice lace
cold in the shadows
like regrets
snow falls sullen
and quiet
cream in this light
close my eyes and
listen to the breath
of the water sighing
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Comments
Eduardo Cruz
Tue, 2011-01-18 03:31
E.
the imagery is amazing, especially the last verse;
"close my eyes and
listen to the breath
of the water sighing'
I thought of a cold unfeeling peaceful death.
Thanks Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
Hooded Stranger
Tue, 2011-01-18 09:53
Esker
Esker,
Vivid images here. I see Eddie has connected this piece with a "cold unfeeling peaceful death"...I felt this could relate to depression...living in a cold world and detached from 'real life'.
"cold in the shadows like regret" - perfect!
I really enjoyed this piece my friend, thanks for sharing,
HS
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