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Chamber Thoughts
I did not mean to think of you
after all these quiet days,
yet when embraced
by loneliness
I could not help
but ask you why
the door stays shut,
the curtains drawn
like nightfall's shades
and your picture still hangs up
on my wall.
Style / type:
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Poem
Mon, 2014-02-03 06:40
William
Hi William,
Just loved your poem. That's what I feel when I think of my someone special. :)
Cheers,
Kavi
William Saint George
Mon, 2014-02-03 07:17
Thanks Kavi. I was thinking
Thanks Kavi. I was thinking about someone special when I wrote this.
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No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot
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Poem
Mon, 2014-02-03 09:16
William
Your welcome.....Looking forward for more such poems :)
Cheers,
Kavi
raj
Mon, 2014-02-03 07:47
William
The two comments from you and Kavita are but a confirmation that when you write your thoughts about someone special they pour out as wonderfully as you have done...thanks for posting..
regards,
raj
raj (sublime_ocean)
William Saint George
Mon, 2014-02-03 08:34
Thanks for reading it too.
Thanks for reading it too.
No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot
http://www.wsgeorge.com/
alidzain
Mon, 2014-02-03 18:47
love it
love it when its straight from the heart. Can I have more of this type of poem please?
Alid
William Saint George
Tue, 2014-02-04 09:26
Most of my recent poetry has
Most of my recent poetry has taken this character. You're sure to see more of this. Thanks for reading :)
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No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot
http://www.wsgeorge.com/
Race_9togo
Mon, 2014-02-03 22:37
Hello William
Not a single thing wrong with this, just wanted to say most very well done.
Respectfully, Race
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William Saint George
Tue, 2014-02-04 09:27
Thanks for reading this poem.
Thanks for reading this poem.
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No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot
http://www.wsgeorge.com/
Rula
Tue, 2014-02-04 01:30
Poignant!
beautifully done with tons of honest feelings.
I wonder how can anyone resist opening the champer's door after reading this
and the ending:
"and your picture still hangs up
on my wall"
works just perfect. :)
Bravo!!!
❤❤❤❤❤❤
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William Saint George
Tue, 2014-02-04 09:27
Thanks Rula :) .
Thanks Rula :)
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No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot
http://www.wsgeorge.com/