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Beside
To be beside the sea
mind and body in harmony
listening to the sea’s symphony
a water creature is me
feels like heaven ought to be
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Comments
Frenchf
Sun, 2013-02-10 13:15
I loved it but
felt it would benefit from removing the word "is"
a water creature, me
sueb
Sun, 2013-02-10 13:47
thanks a mil will remove
thanks a mil will remove cheers Sueb x