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Feeling Frisky
I'm feeling frisky
Can we be a bit risky?
find some little alcove
and share our love
I've never been so brave
but you, right now, I crave
Is that a sound of condemnation?
No, cos here you are at my work station
You say "I need you to do some filing"
I outwardly moan but can't stop smiling
never has it felt so right
can't wait for more afternoon delight
Style / type:
Structured: Western
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Comments
Race_9togo
Wed, 2012-12-12 02:56
Hi Sue
LOL This good, but I think lines 3 & 4 need a re-write. "alcove" is real hard to rhyme!
Nice one.
Respectfully, Race
"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo
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sueb
Wed, 2012-12-12 04:56
Hi Jim
Hi Jim
thanks for enjoying this little one but keeping in line with this poem instead of alcove I immediately thought of nook and won't tell u what I rhymed with that lol have a gr8 day x
Race_9togo
Wed, 2012-12-12 05:18
LOL
LOL!!!
Respectfully, Race
"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo
http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo
loved
Thu, 2012-12-20 14:28
sad not many frisked ,,,but beautiful imagination
as well as invitation
well done
hope he came
loved
sueb
Thu, 2012-12-20 15:03
thanks loved he came lol x
thanks loved he came lol x
loved
Thu, 2012-12-20 15:07
CONGRATS Ma'am
i knew he must have
this was just a confirmation
loved