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It's All In The Eyes
The eyes always my first point of contact
Can make my heart contract
They can make me foolishly act
that's a known fact
It's not a smile
that will me beguile
but a twinkle in an eye
that I espy
They say eyes are the reflections of the soul
maybe that can explain to me their romantic role
A wink, a blink can make my confidence rise or sink
I lose all ability to think
If you like me stare, flirt, emphasise
whatever you want just use your eyes
They have the power to hypnotise
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Structured: Western
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Comments
Candlewitch
Thu, 2012-11-15 11:01
Hello Sue,
I very much like the construction and phrasing of your wording. It feels almost lyrical. There is nothing I would change. I usually quote back my favorite lines, but in the case of this piece, I like them all!
always, Cat
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sueb
Thu, 2012-11-15 11:04
What a lovely comment (big
What a lovely comment (big smile on face) glad u enjoyed all the best Sueb x
loved
Thu, 2012-11-22 10:11
all that I too can boast of
all that I too can boast of
is or should I say
are my eyes
they mesmerise
lovely eyes urs
poem
loved
sueb
Thu, 2012-11-22 10:49
Hi loved thanks so much glad
Hi loved thanks so much glad u enjoyed and I'm sure your eyes do mesmerise all the best sueb x