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The Coming Of The Night
What sung the crow to the dying sun,
As passed day unto night;
Beheld the moon as she begun
Her usurping of the light.
At silver light the raven calls,
A silence fills the halls.
No man can stir, no beast can bear,
The coming of night fall.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Last few words:
This is one of my all time favorites.
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Comments
William Saint George
Sat, 2012-02-25 14:26
Thank you sir!
This is one of my favourite poems. I'm glad you enjoyed it too.
No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot
http://www.wsgeorge.com/
Candlewitch
Sat, 2012-02-25 14:58
Hello WSG,
a tasty little morsel, this. A treat for the mind and heart! Good title, superb structure and content! My favorite lines are:
At silver light the raven calls,
A silence fills the halls.
loved it!
always, Cat
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William Saint George
Sat, 2012-02-25 16:33
Thanks Cat
It's all encouraging.
No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot
http://www.wsgeorge.com/
Eduardo Cruz
Sat, 2012-02-25 18:56
Will,
This is an excellent piece of written. But it seem to recall a poem or a part of an English play I read somewhere. I think that if a poem does that, takes me back to some great piece of writing, then that poem is written masterfully.
Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
William Saint George
Sun, 2012-02-26 20:22
:)
Thanks Ed. Pleasure knowing that.
No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot
http://www.wsgeorge.com/