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Listen To Life Sing
Listen to life sing, what a beautiful thing
As the wind whispers secrets to her sisters
Rivers flowing, as if they love not knowing
Oh, fuck the best in me, leave that to destiny
I want to exist like leaves and the air that breathes
I’ll fly with sparrows ducking bows and arrows
Oh, I’ll seduce the night as I welcome first light
No authority, only a soul to set free
To weirdelf Cheers Mate
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Comments
scribbler
Tue, 2012-01-10 18:08
hello
Were it me I'd split the rhyming verses into two verses.I like the idea conveyed of existing for existence's sake only. Would also reccomend adding just in front of exist in L-5............stan
Apostolos "Paul...
Tue, 2012-01-10 18:11
thx Scribbler
for stopping by
Apostolos "Paul...
Tue, 2012-01-10 18:23
mark
thx for stoping by
weirdelf
Tue, 2012-01-10 19:53
thanks for the dedication mate,
love this, quite extraordinarily different direction for you, prosodic values blossoming
cheers,
Jess
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Apostolos "Paul...
Tue, 2012-01-10 20:22
thank you
for all the help buddy
t. reflexion
Tue, 2012-01-10 21:11
welcome first light
This is an interesting piece, beautiful imagery, but I can't place it, so I read and read again. Well done
tr
A rekindled faith - Dancing in the Light
Apostolos "Paul...
Tue, 2012-01-10 21:18
thanks reflection
nife of you to stop by be well
Yeorgios
Wed, 2012-01-11 14:55
Interesting images Paul as
Interesting images Paul as always, with an air of purity and quit relevant, indeed, to the surrounding circumstances of our existential predicament and a concise reminder of what is essential in life.
Apostolos "Paul...
Wed, 2012-01-11 15:01
Thanks you georgios
Great perspective
Apostolos "Paul...
Wed, 2012-01-11 20:03
thx you lon
great to hear from you
China Blue
Sat, 2012-01-14 23:03
Paul
Interesting and very different for you. I see a whole new person emerging
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)
Apostolos "Paul...
Sun, 2012-01-15 00:43
thx
fror stopping by