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The Scorned One
The selfish wrath of a discarded
lover will live on, and on;
though they're told that, "it's over"
now, they don't want to be...gone!
True, you...yourself did dissmiss them
so, you alone are to blame;
and that's when they start justifying
plotting an endless, cruel "game"!
Being scorned, they're more driven
to teach you suffrage, much worse;
revenge is a dish served, best...cold
with a large cup, of warm "curse"!
Narry a trade-off, nor any time-outs
will be appearing soon, your way;
so, that'll prove you're the "bad guy"
and that's no matter, what you say!
The scorned is focused on your sufferring
at a comparitively higher degree,
than the shame that they ache from
for having no, integrity.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words:
Nope. Dunno from where, this one came.
Editing stage:
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Comments
weirdelf
Fri, 2011-09-02 06:01
Good poem
Bad ending.
cheers,
Jess
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